Life in the future will be much better than it is today. I think there will be more tall buildings and most of the families will live in a big apartment. There will be a robot in each home. The robot will help us do the housework, and we have more time to relax. The students won’t go to school. They can study at home on computers.
专家老师，文中划线部分单词是去掉更好还是保留更好？感觉可能不是特指。最后一句中at home 和on computers 互换地方是不是更适合？觉得学习的方法和study的关系更密切。盼望专家老师解惑，十分感谢
Life in the future will be much better than it is today. I think there will be more tall buildings and most of the families will live in a big apartment. There will be a robot in each home. The robot will help us do the housework, and we have more time to relax. The students won’t go to school. They can study at home on computers.
这篇小作文假如源于一个中学生之手，则除去个别部分需要改进外，可以说是很好的。但如果是一个大学生写的，则结构过于简单，应适合用并列或从属方法，或有关联的单句合并为复合句，使短文的句式有所变化，防止单调的简单句。
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Life in the future will be much better than it is today. There will be more tall buildings and mostfamilies will live in a big apartment. There will be a robot in each home. The robot will help （to）do the housework,so thatpeople have more time for variousactivities.
Students won’t have to go to school since they can studyon computers at home.
1 第一句为本文的主题句，已经提示这是你的怎么看。第二句的I think为多余，应删去。
2 most of the families改为most families. 由于the families的特指指代不明。应改为泛指。
3 and改为so that, 突出因果关系。去掉us和we，用第三人称口吻表现，防止we和they的人称代词混用。
4 more time to relax改为more time for various activities，表意愈加了解。
5 The students改为泛指Students
6 wont go to school改为wont have to go to school。
7 最后一句改为since引导是什么原因状语从句，加大句间联系。
8 on computers为方法状语，at home为地址状语。一般方法状语应在地址状语之前。
9 以上是从语法和表达的角度的修改。从作文内容角度讲，既然说的是将来的生活，则应包含生活的衣食住行，假如加几句话说明将来的交通、食品等，则内容上就健全了。
